Arts and Social Science conclusions
Theme: Berkeley and the existence of matter
Another solid conclusion structure
There are a number of features in this conclusion that point to its high quality. The student's language is formal, but we can clearly discern his 'voice' in the excerpt. He approves of the theory he is writing about, but does not need to use any 'first-person' language to make this clear.
Likewise, his conclusion structure follows three discrete sections; he restates his thesis, he summarises his main points, and he finishes with a concluding statement.
First person language
We frequently have students asking how it is possible to present the writer's perspective without using first person strategies like "I think…" or "In my opinion…". This essay demonstrates very well how this can be done. Watch Sean Macleod from Smrt English on Youtube explain how to maintain a formal tone in your writing.
- First, use the buttons on the right to guide you through the lesson. Read the excerpt and look at the notes provided.
- Watch the video on maintaining a formal tone (link above)
- Complete the short activity (button above to the right).
- Finally, feel welcome to contact Student Learning either personally, or via the Moodle writing forum to discuss your writing (University of Waikato students only).