Arts and Social Science introductions
Theme: Teacher / student relationships
Do relationships matter between teachers and students during students' education? How do these impact personal development? Discuss. (1000 words)
Getting straight to the point: The strength of this student's introduction is in his very efficient use of sentence structure to convey his meaning efficiently. It falls precisely at 10% of the total word count, which is the conventional length for introductions (and conclusions).
Sentence strategies: This student opens his introduction by using a direct (rhetorical) question. This is an interesting strategy, and in this particular case it worked.
The problem for you is that some teachers would like this as a direct and efficient method for identifying a concern, while other teachers would see it as less-than-formal in style, and want you to use an embedded question instead.
The activity for this excerpt invites you to transfer the direct question into an embedded question.
- First, use the buttons on the right to guide you through the lesson. Read the excerpt and look at the notes provided.
- Complete the short activity.
- Finally, feel welcome to contact Student Learning either personally, or via the Moodle writing forum to discuss your writing (University of Waikato students only).